tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-34199334.post116219556272698256..comments2023-03-22T06:12:52.294+08:00Comments on Stories: THE PLAN.docSilverfishWritershttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17123379829988938033noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-34199334.post-1162891897526000482006-11-07T17:31:00.000+08:002006-11-07T17:31:00.000+08:00I like your first story better, Shih Li. I feel th...I like your first story better, Shih Li. I feel that in this one, the character of the girlfriend hasn't been developed enough so much so that when she turns down his proposal, her words appear rather 'cardboardish' (no such word in the dictionary, in case someone's going to jump at me for it, but you know what I mean). The plot's good though. Keep on writing! Cheers, ZuAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-34199334.post-1162478254452355072006-11-02T22:37:00.000+08:002006-11-02T22:37:00.000+08:00Unique plot and flow. Something different:)Unique plot and flow. Something different:)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-34199334.post-1162449195453898182006-11-02T14:33:00.000+08:002006-11-02T14:33:00.000+08:00i think it's boring...you're losing your writing s...i think it's boring...you're losing your writing style...i guess, that's what happened to certain writers. K.S Maniam rocks!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-34199334.post-1162431539123721612006-11-02T09:38:00.000+08:002006-11-02T09:38:00.000+08:00Thanks for the feedback. Yes, I had problems with ...Thanks for the feedback. Yes, I had problems with the tenses. Tried to differentiate what were meant to be current journal entries from previous events and confused myself in the process...SLAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-34199334.post-1162313467446598792006-11-01T00:51:00.000+08:002006-11-01T00:51:00.000+08:00Great descriptive style! Very enjoyable, edge of t...Great descriptive style! Very enjoyable, edge of the seat funny to the bone, tingling and lingering. Wowsers.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-34199334.post-1162271712278270292006-10-31T13:15:00.000+08:002006-10-31T13:15:00.000+08:00Wow! Shih Li you are a writing machine!!!Interesti...Wow! Shih Li you are a writing machine!!!<BR/><BR/>Interesting story.. good work!<BR/><BR/>-kokyee-Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-34199334.post-1162250960870028712006-10-31T07:29:00.000+08:002006-10-31T07:29:00.000+08:00Interesting. Especially that you have chosen to wr...Interesting. Especially that you have chosen to write in the pov of a man. A bit long I thought. You need to edit it a bit to tighten it and increase the pace. Also watch out for the occassional slippages in tenses.SilverfishWritershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17123379829988938033noreply@blogger.com