tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-34199334.post7807049440119619057..comments2023-03-22T06:12:52.294+08:00Comments on Stories: WinSilverfishWritershttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17123379829988938033noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-34199334.post-49495956568490663982007-04-11T14:58:00.000+08:002007-04-11T14:58:00.000+08:00Hello Kasturi, Very well done. A few suprises here...Hello Kasturi,<BR/><BR/> Very well done. A few suprises here and there and the language is...savoury. Looking forward to reading your next piece.<BR/><BR/>cheers,<BR/>DannyDhanen Maheshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01695616166487471771noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-34199334.post-56713131340060008872007-02-12T10:10:00.000+08:002007-02-12T10:10:00.000+08:00Thanks all for yr comments - really aprreciate the...Thanks all for yr comments - really aprreciate the feedback. Kar Jin & SL, truthfully, I too wondered abt the ending and worried abt it being contrived. But it ended the way it did. Will definitely think abt it more when I attempt my next one. Azmi,will take you up on the chicken curry at the mamak k ;)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12488339787765131559noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-34199334.post-62003473496943126512007-02-12T09:28:00.000+08:002007-02-12T09:28:00.000+08:00Hello Kasturi. Nice writing.I think you've done wh...Hello Kasturi. Nice writing.I think you've done what I guess you set out to do - good pace, good characterization, interesting viewpoint. My only issue is with the twist. I feel that the story would have worked just as well if the abused boy was not someone already known to him. Somehow, tying it up so neatly seems a little too contrived. Just a personal preference...Cheers,SLAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-34199334.post-35041271263712338672007-02-11T20:29:00.000+08:002007-02-11T20:29:00.000+08:00I enjoyed your reading of this story as the humoro...I enjoyed your reading of this story as the humorous bits were sharply projected! I would imagine Kana's punishment would be his conscience which would continue to torment him as long as he lives. Even when he owns a chain of car washing business in future,the guilt should weigh down on him, if he is only human. So, is there going to be an interesting sequel to this short story??? Will treat you to a curry lunch if there is...don't worry, in a mamak shop lah!:>Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-34199334.post-33405028346124521722007-02-08T18:34:00.000+08:002007-02-08T18:34:00.000+08:00Congratulations! Good story, nice pace and touchin...Congratulations! Good story, nice pace and touching ending. I would have left out the last line though. Keep writing those stories!<BR/>XDAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-34199334.post-35879545517617298242007-02-08T12:48:00.000+08:002007-02-08T12:48:00.000+08:00Love it! More stories to come I hope :)Love it! More stories to come I hope :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-34199334.post-50920969498128539132007-02-08T10:37:00.000+08:002007-02-08T10:37:00.000+08:00Actually,I challenged myself to show this thief as...Actually,I challenged myself to show this thief as a human. The real twist is, I have been a victim of a snatch thief myself and hate all of them for what they do ;)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12488339787765131559noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-34199334.post-69945137719669676842007-02-07T14:52:00.000+08:002007-02-07T14:52:00.000+08:00This is a good story and it moves along at a nice ...This is a good story and it moves along at a nice pace. When I got to the end, I did wish that something horrible had happened to the snatch thief. I think he has been treated too sympathetically in the story. Guess you know now what I think of these cowards who prey on others. Cheers, ZuAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com